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Re: The girl and water Prologue
Thanks everyone! :)
Aug 7, 2011 -
Re: The girl and water Prologue
I use to love the water. I loved how it smelled, looked, and even felt. But that was then, this is now. And my feelings have changed. Because, when your ...
Aug 7, 2011 -
Re: Maryann's Ethics
Okay, well I must say I agree with ALL of your comments. In my opinion I have to idea where this crazy story was even going. I think that because ...
Jul 21, 2011 -
Re: Lady Porcelain
Very interesting, and very dark and sinister sounding. I like the idea that I think your going for its just I think you should keep writing and explain the situation ...
Apr 27, 2011 -
Re: Maryann's Ethics
Maryann woke up to the soft sound of rain hitting her bed room window. The sky out side was dark, cold, and sinister looking. She had a feeling that today ...
Apr 19, 2011 -
Re: Maryann's Ethics 2
Maryann was walking to the near by Shop Mart, deciding whether or not she should get a new vacuum cleaner. Knowing her OCD would eventually take over her mind she ...
Apr 6, 2011 -
Re: Unknown
Hi! First off I love this! I think it's a great start to something. It's really a cliff hanger! It's something I would read and wonder 'What did this pour ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Godess Kram and my heaven
First off this is a very interesting story, I like the idea and concept. Just a few things that don't make senses to me. First is your MC male or ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Exposed Secrets Prologue/ Original.
Well hello, I really like the idea and concept that you have going on it's just toward the middle and end I got a little confused. "As the Spawn gotten ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Maryann's Ethics
Maryann woke up to the soft sound of rain hitting her bed room window. The sky out side was dark, cold, and almost sinister looking. She had a feeling that ...
Apr 3, 2011 -
Re: Maryann's Ethics
Maryann woke up to the soft sound of rain hitting her bed room window. The sky out side was dark, cold, and almost sinister looking. She had a feeling that ...
Apr 3, 2011 -
Re: Dream
The water all around me was slashing into my face making it hard for me to see and breath. I held on desperately to a piece of floating wreckage I ...
Mar 31, 2011 -
Re: Alone
Whoa! Really great, I didn't see to many mistakes or problems. I really like the idea! The end of it was INTENSE! I can also relate to the story and ...
Mar 29, 2011 -
Re: lost chapter 4
4 “Get up! This isn’t no hotel!” Yelled a short man with an ugly face, he stood with the door to the wagon open and was begging to become impatient. ...
Mar 28, 2011 -
Re: Lost chapter 1
Thanks! That's all stuff that I will go over (the maid thing I thought I did but I guess I forgot to!) Haha thanks!
Mar 28, 2011
