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  • Lyric Poetry Re: WORST ENEMY

    Hi guys! Thank you for reviewing my work. I edited it so I hope it's better.

    Jan 11, 2012
  • Lyric Poetry Re: WORST ENEMY

    Funny how when I try to get better I move ten steps back. My own personal hater, fighting an internal vendetta, negatively criticising. But the more I beat myself up, ...

    Dec 2, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Searching for colours

    Hi! I really liked your poem. I could feel the desire to find joy in the beauty that is surrounds us. I liked the use of colours too. All in ...

    Dec 2, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: That Can't Be Jesus, Where's the Crown?

    Hi again, I still miss the old poem but we have to make room for change. Anyway, I like your use of imagery and there is no negativity.

    Dec 2, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: That Can't Be Jesus, Where's the Crown?

    Hi' I know it has been like a year since I read the poem but it feels really different. Did you change your whole poem? I haven't seriously gone through ...

    Nov 26, 2011
  • YWS Re: Critiquing poetry

    I second Lumi. This article is very useful. Thanks so much.

    Nov 26, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Six Love Questions

    Hi. I really loved your poem. It was really sweet.Keep writing.

    Nov 26, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: That Can't Be Jesus, Where's the Crown?

    Hey! Your poem is interesting and it feels like your angry at the world or someone. Anyway, I like the use of acronyms standing for different things. I can picture ...

    Aug 26, 2010
  • Narrative Poetry Re: He who borrowed and didn't return

    Hey guys! Thanks for your feedback. Snoink, I think you should come up with your own thief because in this world, there are a lot of people who steal different ...

    Aug 24, 2010
  • Narrative Poetry Re: He who borrowed and didn't return

    I hope this can be called a poem :D Haven't you heard? The robber came So quietly, So slowly, With skill, And expertise. He stole. He climbed the custom made ...

    May 3, 2010
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Five Silence

    you're so good. I love you're poem. It reminds me that sometimes we need silence to realise the small things.

    Apr 16, 2010
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: Foolish love

    I like it. I thought it was going to be another romance but there is a twist in events. I think you should write more because you've left me in ...

    Apr 16, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Letters to My Grandma

    It's sketchy but I really hope you like it. Nena, I'm sorry I haven't written in a while. To be honest, I really couldn't get myself to write. I miss ...

    Apr 16, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: The letter

    I like it. I'm sort of writing a similar story so I'm excited to read your work. I only have one correction: I think we say 'underwear drawer' instead of ...

    Apr 15, 2010
  • Romantic Novels Re: one hundred and two shades of green 1.1

    You're good but you need to work on your punctuation.

    Apr 6, 2010


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