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i like it, but in some places it sounds like you're trying tho force the rhyme, other than that i thought it was cool esp. the last stanza

this is really beutiful! everything flows really well and i understand about the last line of the first stanza being abrupt but i liked it! theres not much else i ...

that forged but cheeky smile, stretched for f***in' miles and miles, til it shettered back to bland, where you crushed my heart in your sweaty hand!

hey im mimi and im newish too so hi and welcome. i write poetry but most of it is pretty crap. just read my bio if you want too know ...

Nice one! its so action-packed and lllloooonnnngggg. my chapters are only short ones most of the little errors have already been mantioned at least the ones i noticed anyway its ...

i get it sort ofish, kinda, half way.etc. i think i understand anyway. is it about when someone feels intimidated by you dont know why? its probably not. i think ...

i keep a diary, its full of poetry and lyrics oh and also pictures but i do write how i feel, story ideas etc. i only started it when i ...

oh i made a mistake, in the first line, its meant to be dont

you daont see the tears i cry, and i dont understand your lies, anymore than you love me! and on those hungry days i think of your evil ways, much, ...

i picked venus but there is this planet I'd love to go to its called asteroid b612, its the little princes planet. actually i dont know if it exists. but ...

thanks for the advice. i will work on the stuff you mentioned.

You dont see these tears i cry And i dont understand your lies Anymore than you love me What's your pleasure Is my pain Whats so fun About this game? ...

this is so cool. its beutiful how mysterious it is!!

I slammed the door in Lambchops blood covered face and rampaged out of the corpse filled bungalow with rage. I couldn’t believe he would do such a thing but after ...