nixonblitzen

No crits? I really like this. All the images are really beautiful and I was really drawn in by the allusion of the title. I like the title's relationship to ...

Lauren, this IS a poem! And I think it's quite nice! I liked how it was a collection of flashes, and it didn't really make sense until I read the ...

All right guys... I know I've been MIA from YWS for a while and I feel guilty about crawling back and asking for reviews. But I did a whole bunch ...

I think this is really cool (despite the depressing subject...) Dear, you should cover your arms, your pain is showing. The scars are exposed to all and the crowd is ...

I have read this over many times. It's very interesting to me. You oscillate between your desolate feelings in one stanza and your possible choices in the next. There has ...

I like this. It's like a snippet of an experience and I want to know more about the characters. Is the speaker a boy or a girl? Is the "he" ...

Did you mean for this to sound like "This is Just to Say" by William Carlos Williams? The rhythm is very much like it and you use some of the ...

you have a lovely voice.

This is beautifully written, but I find it a bit hard to understand. After the first three lines (which, by the way, I find just perfect) the point-of-view changes from ...

Honestly, honestly, honestly. This is sooooo beautiful. I love how you turn Icarus into a love story. His wings of wax, Gilded gold and beautiful, but Cold to the touch ...

My main problem with this is punctuation! I think for some poems it's okay to go light on the punctuation, but in the case of this poem, the lack of ...

I read this a few days ago and have been meaning to get back. I'd first like to say, what's with the preface? you sound like you have a major ...

I have to say, I think this is really genius. It's so real. I had a friend like this. First she had depression and they were going to move to ...

Good job. You are a great storyteller. However, this doesn't seem much like a poem to me. It seems more like prose that you broke up into 4-line stanzas. For ...

I love this, especially the last stanza. The way it doesn't rhyme really works with the words themselves to create a feeling of melancholy. It is a bit startling that ...