nixonblitzen

Hello, there! Let's start out with the nitpicks, shall we? The way your hand always find mine, Subject-verb disagreement. Do you mean "Hand find s " or "Hand s find"? ...

Hello! Is this a known structure, or did you make it up? It looks nice, the way the stanzas are all the same shape, but I don't know if it ...

Song: I Love How You Love Me, The Paris Sisters Word: Reversal Having Mrs. Calvert for eighth grade English was the WORST. She wore shorter skirts than anybody’s mother and ...

Welcome to YWS, Werewolf_Girl! Don't forget that you should do two reviews for every thing you post. That way everyone will get reviews - and reviewing really helps to improve ...

Wow. I love this. I don't know why, but it gives me kind of a Beatnik, On the Road vibe. I think the strongest thing about this is the narrative ...

It's just so awful. What I'd really like to know is how you knew how to describe labor! The descriptions were really well done - grotesque and lovely. I like ...

Jon talked about the "you" in this poem as a she. Funny, I thought of it as a he the whole time. Which is it? I found the first section ...

This is a really interesting sequence of emotions. The ending was actually kind of sad for me. I didn't like that it was a new hand. What happened to the ...

Intriguing story. Is this going to be a utopia/dystopia story? Because that "Father" guy is sounding pretty sketch about now. Under typical circumstances, a teen who misspells their name would ...

I agree with Tyler. This poem is really self-conscious. I like the idea of making fun of writing poetry and trying to rhyme, but since you told us that you ...

I have to say I love this. Part 1: In the classical days, the days before slipstreams, they would simply put those people to death; this was a much more ...

Song: Can't Take It, All American Rejects (don't laugh at me... it was my freshman year) Word: Tragic Hero The morning sun streams through the bars on Jared’s window, but ...

This is really interesting. I like the haughtiness of the seagull and all the imagery. Punctuation. You have a lack of it. I think it takes away slightly from the ...

Reminded me a bit of The Alchemist by Paulo Coelho (probably because I just read it). I'd recommend it; it's a good book. Now on to your poem: I think ...

I really like your theme and what you're actually saying in this. But the way you're saying it kind of makes it hard to understand. Capitalization. Is there any rhyme ...