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Hello, there. I have to say I was intrigued by this being a Star Wars screenplay. My main question is, how authentically Star Wars is this supposed to be? Just ...

I am surprised to find so many Gatsby-haters here. I guess I thought it was more or less universally well-liked. I love this book. It made an indelible on my ...

Yeah, I feel like at times it tries a little to hard to be deep and philosophy-ish. Especially at the beginning, I felt like I was getting bombarded with little ...

Hello, Carl! I'm Rachel. Welcome to YWS. You are sixteen, going on seventeen, innocent as a rose... Do you like The Sound of Music? I don't understand people who say ...

Bonjour, Jules. Let's start out with the nitpicks. “Ugh!” Ryan slammed to the ground, blood around her lips and pain in her stomach. It's probably just me, but when I ...

Hello, angelwing! I've marked the grammatical & spelling errors, and also showed you how I would reword some things the make them sound better. There I was , standing at ...

thank you, mars. neither was I!

Sorry to flood the boards with my stuff, but I had to finish cal's contest because the deadline is TODAY. Song: Dream, Roy Orbison Word: pathos “Hi, Becky. This is ...

Hello! I liked this. It wasn't as far-fetched as I had expected! Andromeda touched on a lot & I agree. One other thing was, for the first half of the ...

Song: A Whole New World, from Aladdin Word: Irony Mommy wakes you up. “Five more minutes!” you try to say, but you can’t ‘cause you’re still asleep. Mommy opens the ...

Hello Twilight Dog! Welcome to YWS. So, ditto on everything Juniper said. This poem doesn't have very good rhythm. I find it helpful to read my poems aloud. It usually ...

Hello, mayonnaise! I've never critiqued a script before, so I'm not sure how helpful this will be... Is this a standalone scene, or is it part of a play? I'd ...

Hi there, Kiki! "You look adorible trying to act funny," she said. Should be "adorable". "Yeah, my humor never seems to translate with others." I said, blushing and moving my ...

Hey winter! Welcome! What are your favourite things to learn? History? Physics? Animals? What other books do you like besides Twilight? What sports do you like? Nice to meet you! ...

In Memoriam, from Les Choristes Deux ex machina The soldiers march onward in rigid rows, Identical breastplates catching the light; Each man is focused on the cursed foes, Teeming with ...