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Hi, again! She watched as people strolled mindlessly, almost robotically, like zombies down East Avenue on the eroding sidewalks that traced the buildings in the city like old chalk. I ...

Hi, 82manycookies. Cute username! Don't forget the 2:1 YWS policy - 2 reviews for every 1 story/poem/etc. you post. The trees swayed harmoniously in the channeled wind that crept around ...

I quite like the idea. I'd do it. Just make sure that the reader isn't confused about who's doing what. Maybe you could call them "the old man" or "the ...

Hello, Drama Queen! This is pretty well-written. I didn't find any spelling or grammar errors. I do wonder why "in-limbo" is hyphenated. Why isn't it just "You're in limbo"? Unless ...

That wasn't much of an introduction! Welcome, anyway. Who are you? What are your favourite things? What do you like to write? PM me if you need any help. -Rachel

Hi, Ashleigh. A story, with such emotion that your gut will wrench in pain as if you were the being it was happening to. You don't need the comma here. ...

Hi, Hao! Great poem. Really sad. I think it is a bit long. You have four stanzas of "What happened to this?" and "What happened to that?" The lament started ...

Hello, Geek. Interesting poem. I Am Geeek Please stick to standard spellings. My apologies if this is a typo. I am a geek. I can apply the force to any ...

blood (sorry)

So, for as long as I can remember, I have had this innate urge to keep every sentence or drawing I've ever scribbled on a piece of notebook paper. I ...

6/10 So depressing...

7.5/10 Peace signs are a little overdone, but it's beautiful!

This happens to me quite frequently. Probably because I reread my old stuff too often. I made an audible noise when I came across this sentence: "Zack is shy, but ...

10/10 I love The Highwayman!

I want to hug you, this made me so happy. I like that this is very sensory. It involves tastes and smells and sounds and temperatures and I can feel ...