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Lord of the Flies is my FAVORITE BOOK. I would love to help you (because I am jealous and wish I had to write an essay about it) First of ...

I sure enjoyed this. Very believable Mormon dialogue. : ) It was a bit hard to follow with all the different characters. I HATE writing scripts though, so I don't ...

It needs a revision. And a fitting name. Thanks guys! Pull the bow smoothly now, Like a rake in a zen garden. Curve your chin now, With the essence of ...

I'm sorry no one has commented on this. Someone should have! I enjoyed reading this. You have an interesting, old-fashioned style. The winds were strong today, bustling and roaring like ...

Hi, Eliza. I liked this. Based on this alone, I'd say you are a good writer! : ) I read the person's poem and made my little nitpicks about grammatical ...

I loved this. I love the description. I can imagine you quickly taking in and passing judgments about the people in the car. You gave it an easy and effortless ...

This just has a really endearing quality. It's hard to dislike it. I understand your repetition of the one stanza, but within the first two stanzas there is awkward repetition. ...

maybe this is just me, but the first stanza reminded me of like a love story. for the whole poem, i thought it was a girl talking to a guy! ...

Undulant, you haven't been on YWS in 10 days! Come back! I liked your poem!!!! Chapped Eating the dandruff scabs off my head my eyes are watering from nonexistent onions ...

I neverrr read long stuff, and I was interested enough to read all of the way through this, so good job! haha I liked this. You have some comma errors, ...

Just the beginning of something longer. John was born on a large brass bed. His mother could just make out the pale curve of her high, damp forehead in the ...

thank you! this stuff is invaluable for me!

He wasn’t too old for her. Eleven years? Nah, it was like the prairie. She was the oldest daughter of a planter; he was the handsome twenty-eight-year-old man who had ...

I like this work. It is thought-provoking. The world My world Is rocked back and forth. (I like this line. It works well with the rest of the poem, suggesting ...

bravo, my friend. you create the most interesting images without confusing me. you make me use my brain in a way that i like. i think your stuff is genius.