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:D nice (even though i see the lines where I helped you)! i think there could have been a better way for eol to be captured, though than the " ...

:D a few mistakes: Tylor and Squall both saluted said, “I’m ready this should say either "tylor and squall both saluted and said,"I'm ready." or "tylor and squall both saluted, ...

it's great fun to write. creating your own special world with characters of your own is a joyful experience. especially when you have an audiance reading yourr story, and helping ...

:D yo everyone. i'm Zoltan. i love star wars and naruto, and my story is called the almega galaxy: corruption. go check it out, please (if you haven't already!). i'm ...

yay for you, jared! you finally came!

Down the hallway, in the kitchen, something heavy clattered to the ground and shouts from his father's servants echo after it. keep the past tense. it should say:and his fathers ...

okay...sounds good, but one error: It was an old game, and he had beaten in just last week, but it was his favourite Final Fantasy game. this should be either:he ...

so yeah both mine and timeas stories are connected to anyone that was wondering. thank you, that hopefully clears some things up. :) pm me if you have any more ...

this is the first scifi on yws that ive read..i must say its interesting but a bit confusing :? well...the simulation thing is cool...and a little humor sprinkled on top ...

umm..the s-14 will be other times, to say the least. the 2 ships never collided..and i shall work on the five senses thing in other chapters, that's a good recommendation ...

you are right: i do need to work on seperating the two personalities. however, the skirmish wasn't too important to make much longer. I'm glad that you enjoyed it!

thanks for finally logging on and reading my book. part 2 is now posted!

Chapter 2: Passage to Galeon How , thought Kwest. How did it happen? He’d never really pondered too deeply about what happened this morning. How did I trip that guy? ...

thanks part 2 will be out soon!!! thank you all!! :) the story is mucho better now.

i'd go to coruscant or most any other planets in the star wars galaxy. :) (yeah, nothing much exciting about the other planets.)