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must be the best poem i've read yet! hidden meanings and all...awesome!!!

he...great except that diet coke thing is kinda funny but random :)

well i know most of the time i get critiques but i wish i'd get them sooner after my work was done :( . overall,though,nothing is terrible on YWS :D

i literally just read it i like the clash with clau and mesh

“what your saying is that until Timber achieves independence, something that might not come for another few years, we have to do whatever you say?” your should be you're, simply. ...

you are right here, kitty, Cere and Kwest will be developed and flaws will develop in the next chapter with a major battle sequence :) I will use more smell ...

wow thats soooo good i think i'll go play it give me the link (if there is no downloaing involved :P )

well, yes but it could have been put differently. it was intersting, and there was a discrepency thing you were talking about now that i think about it but not ...

you could almost feel the wound(not that i know what that feels like, but i've split my knee an inch deep)...(ow...)....anyway, the title helps the reader(well at least me) and ...

well, you dont have to take my advice, but i think that some of the rhymes were lame, put in just to keep the rhythm :P example: the mink thing. ...

quite the interestingness....short but explanatory :) !

well they got money to buy an apartment, usually middleclass people live in apartments in big cities (like NY). and well, I explained that history of the plasmasword in the ...

i'm not sure if i'm interpereting this right but it sounds really sad. you should make a 'part two' :smt023 lol

huh? what happened? is it over? :smt101

interesting...something about a breakup, but for the most part i dont get it :? sorry. it tells a story, right :? :? :? :? :? :? :? :? :? :? ...