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Chapter 5: Quest “What?! Why’d you let him escape?” Kwest exclaimed as Cere was explaining what had happened the day before. “So I could save you, Kwest. You’re lucky that ...

wow that is short almost scarily short but it is pretty good. (just like this comment lol)

WOW. thats all i can say cause thats the weirdest thing ive ever read. but yeah, its pretty good, i suppose. are all your poems this weird?(this does not require ...

thanks, jabber, helpful as always. yes i know the original version was kinda terrible. :? yeah I changed the plot a lot, i think for the better. and when i ...

Z here. its a pretty good prologue, but I think it should be cleaned up a bit. i believe snow-covered and corpse-strewn should have a dash(-) between them. also, i ...

its been a while....read on :D Chapter 4: First Fight “Are you sure we should be doing this?” Cere yelled at Kwest. “Can’t the police handle this?” Suddenly, two of ...

i like ben 10 and it sounds cool and stuff. i want to know why ben is evil though. ill stay tuned

yeah...okay....sounds interesting...go check out my SW fanfic....!!!!!!!!The Almega Galaxy:Corruption's the name

well, you had many spellling mistakes, among wich you spelled 'feel' 'fell' twice, and in your sig you spelled vampire vimpire. well, this was kinda a boring chapter, and im ...

its Bespin, not Bespen, just to let you know... :) sounds good!! What time setting does it take place in?

wow,that was good! a good way to start the day of reading stories! The plot is developing well! loved it! i'll stay tuned. Z_

well, kristina, youll see....anyway, tim, good ol sis(literally), you did well, overall. good improvement. everyone stay tuned, weve gotten great ideas so far on this series(yes, we)and its great!! :b

well, dynamo, it only gets better, i'll try to post ch. 4 over the weekend :D . timea....yeah, i sorta but not really get this show tell thing, i'll try ...

it sounds kinda funny, but good! no change needed :D

hmm....well, a few key words could change, not sure which ones, but otherwise it was good!!