niclie

no offence but i was a little bored. But i have confidence that it will get better. I love your detail and your flow though you seem to have a ...

Hey so i'm a newbie and this is my first story. I'm sorry my grammer is so bad i need a lot of help in that area. So please be ...

Wow ok its like you hit the fast forward button a few times. Things are happening to fast. It takes time for the event that just happened to set in ...

You have this story in first person but it doesn't seem like you are discribing her feelings at all. It seems like you put this story on fast forward but ...

i really liked your story so far and i'm interested to see what happens next.

Ok so first i like it just remeber that. It seems like your rushing things when Kat wakes her up in the morning like your trying to get to something ...

good i liked it of course being a huge twilight fan and all

i like it keep writing i want to know what happens next

i really like it you seem to write exactly like Steph Meyer so i felt really conected i did find a few mistakes and they were corrected in the other ...

i like it and the flow of your words is nice. Something deep i really liked it good job

I loved the flow the words seemed to fit together. Your thought seemed constant like you knew what you wanted to write about. I love the emotions in this poem ...

I really like it i felt like i related to the characters a lot and I really want to see what happens.

i thought your story was interesting I was into it and related to the characters well. I’m a little confused but who isn’t at the start of the story keep ...

Some of the dialog was a little confusing. I really liked the detail you had. Keep writing your good at it never doubt yourself.

i really like it. I can't wait to read more