nickelpickle

hmmm... Let's take a look... First of all, I have read some of your other stuff and this wasn't as good.... I will do a bit of critiquing here... skeletons ...

My apologies... In America...no, I won't gget started....Its just a difference, sorry

I would like to read it... I am fourteen, so I meet your age limit:) Nikki

What does everyone think? Does punishment prevent crime? What do you think we could be doing to prevent it?

I am not sure if some of this was intentional, but here goes... A solitary figure cold winds cover her thicker than a blanket. I would add a comma after ...

Okay... Some of the corrections I suggest may have been intentional; if it is, pleasea just ignore it:) i am not the blatant good i walk in shadows shaping the ...

To continue... “Some people are destined to fight at some point during their lives. You must be one of these people why else would you have learnt this stuff? I ...

Kassa’s eyes opened slowly, she looked to her right and saw Jok sitting opposite her watching her quietly. When he saw she was awake he reached down into a bag ...

Kassa was standing on something grainy and…wet, her ankles were bathed in freezing cold water; she looked down and saw the bottom of her dress was in the water also. ...

Okay..First off, just an okay topic. I have learned that unless you can really write something phenomenal, you shouldn't use a topic like death, the truth, etc. These are all ...

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Wow, sam.... Your eyes sound just like mine... Mine are bluer in the summer, greener in winter...freaky,hmm? I dont suppose you have brown hair, glasses and are tall?

I don't know about anyone else, but this had me crying... The language could have been more descriptive, but it was good..There was an innocence to it, which was good ...

I love to talk...I annoy everyone, but w/e... I am on the YWS board alot, lmk if you wanna talk... And if I get all advicy, feel free to tell ...

Hi Lee! I am Nicole (Nikki really) and wanted to say WELCOME!!! haha.... Niteowl gives the welcome gifts, so I won't take her job.... Anyway...ermm... Welcome!