nickelodeon

That was good. I like the idea a lot. I would not capitalize 'one thick skin." I think your point is made even if its lower case. You have a ...

The clock ticked on, perpetually at quarter to 3. My feet tapped the floor impatiently and my hands fiddled with my backpack’s zipper in perfect coordination. “Uhhh… Mr. Mopel? May ...

As the heavy door eased shut, the yearbook office lapsed back into its usual oasis of silence. The rowdy halls of Milton High School were drown out by the steady ...

Good Story. It flowed really well. (I can't stand stories that you have to re-read eight trillion times to make sense of them!) I agree that you overdid the accent. ...

Wow. That was confusing. I think you have a good idea going, but it is very hard to understand. That stated, I don't think i'd be the best person to ...

I'll be honest, It was kind of strange. I really liked the description a lot. I wish I could write like that! As a story goes, or even a short ...

Your conversation isn't very realistic. I get the impression that these girls are supposed to be self-absorbed and full of themselves, but i can't imagine anyone talking like that all ...

Midnight Excursion One light dared to break the complete blackness that was the Hampton house at 1am. One small lamp was enough to give away the secret. Mariana Hampton slouched ...

Well... I haven't figured out how to quote stuff yet, so you'll just have to read it my confusing way. First... "as a member of the Platnium Sun" I think ...

Give me feedback please! I don't so much care about grammer (although i'd like to hear that too...) But i'd really like to know if you liked it or how ...

The Pac-Man Machine The arcade was deserted, leaving only the flashng lights and cheery music to keep the old shopkeeper company. The clock on the wall struck 3:00, and, perfecty ...

"But it was better than the standard gray tabletops this piece of junk for a starship fancied, so she said nothing" this piece of junk for a starship. That's confusing. ...

Wow, I really like the ending. A little more description of the spaceship setting would be nice. Actually, a little more description of the characters would be nice too. In ...

"I sharpened my ears as I punched the card given by the grumpy voice on the machine." I'm pretty sure i understand what you mean, but look this line over ...

It's an awesome idea, and I like the relation between the tree and security. As i read it, though, i kept thinking that I can't imagine this happening in real ...