nickelodeon

Well, i really liked it. It seemed like your focus was more on telling a story than on becoming emotionally attached to the characters, and i found that quite enjoyable. ...

I didn't quite understand it the first time i read it, and it's still a little foggy now. I'd try to clarify what's actually happening between them if you do ...

I love the image the whole poem creates - sort of a great civilization now in ruins. Your descriptions were really great. I agree that you should consider revising punctuation, ...

Refuge A soft peace emanated from the sailboat. Resting in bobbing waters, its lonely sail was loose and easy in a gentle day’s breeze. She trusted her fingers to their ...

This is a pretty good story. I'm going to agree that there are some grammar-type issues, but you can probably work those out with a re-read. I'd suggest rethinking the ...

Well, it looks like nit-picky grammar stuff is out of the way, so... I thought it had definite possibilites, and I'm really curious as to how it's all going to ...

Thanks for the critiques! Actually, the names are correct in the last sentence. Belle is being babysat and Hilary is the babysitter. (Both are frightened by the storm and not ...

You totally kept my attention through the whole thing. I like how you didn't realize that it was an orphanage until later in the story. On to the critique... I, ...

Alone in the Storm (Haven't submitted anything in a really long time, so this is my attempt to get back in habit. Tell me what you think.) The night snapped ...

To be short and simple, i like it. It's well phrased. It's relatable, but its still unique (I personally, i have never read anything with quite the same message). I ...

I'm going to start right out by saying that this is not my style. This is not to say that i didn't like it - it just isn't the type ...

Okay, this is mostly good. It's easy to read, and flows nicely from one thought to another. I agree with what the others are saying about plot. It's not really ...

Short and sweet. Always a good thing. I think this was too predictable. From the first sentence, when she was waiting for her parents to come back, I knew what ...

Okay, I'm not sure where you want me to critique the story, so i'll write everything up here. Mostly, i thought it was good. It kept my attention, even though ...

This was really, really good. "The country was sheltered in your arms." Maybe i'm missing the whole point of this sentence, (most likely) but it doesn't make sense to me. ...