nickelodeon

Very entertaining! 'The hag asked the mirror Who truly owned beauty. But the mirror responded, “Snow white – What a cutie.”'

The Monster Her rhythm is steady Breathe in, breathe out Unmoving on pillows Her serenity, no doubt From a window creaking A monster slinks in Sparkle in his eye Resolution ...

I thought this was an adorable idea, but i'm always up for a good love story. =) Reading the poem, and then reading the explanation for the last couple stanzas ...

I thought it was really good, especially in that it does a good job explaining the disease from the perspective of someone who has it. It was well done in ...

Pretty good overall. Definitely gets your point across, which in my opinion makes reading a poem more enjoyable. Your first two stanzas didn't quite meet the rhyme scheme (world, girl),(her, ...

Forgotten Snuggled in grasses Tickled by weather Her writing is fading As if carved by a feather Her corners are rounded Like shoulders gone weary Years added grayness Perpetually bleary ...

Very good. Fun to read, fun to visualize. (Easy to read and visualize too!) So nice job on being well written. Specifically... I'd consider rewording the stanza about Echo, Granger, ...

I liked the general format of the poem. It was easy to read, flowed nicely. I agree it could use some work though, mostly in that it doesn't seem to ...

This is the revised version, so critiques on this first one would be much appreciated. (I left the original one below on just for reference.) Once Upon A Time “Tell ...

"Thursday night—the night you go out if you’re a young man with an ID that has a date of birth that doesn’t add up to twenty one years of age." ...

I especially like the ending - The use of Rapunzel was an unexpected twist, and the descriptions of the step-mother and prince Charming were funny. I think humor is a ...

"in there nice beds with clean sheets, listing to crickets" should be "their" and "listening" I'd also think about writing in complete sentences. I like fragments (I think they're kind ...

First paragraph: I don't like the word "piece" when describing someone's hair. It's not very visual. Maybe "lock" or "wisp" or use your imagination. On the other hand, this is ...

Helpless I hated her. From the cheery rhythm for her soprano voice to the sight of her eyes when she looked at him with perfect confidence and happiness, the thought ...

The Princess’s Dragons Many years in past In a place so far away Lives a story that will last For generations it will stay It tells of a princess dear ...