nickelodeon

The story plot as a whole left me a little confused, but that might just be me, so don't take it too seriously. Just something to consider... I loved the ...

Quite nice, and I think relatable as well. Seeing someone you know, not wanting to see said someone, and not knowing how to - or even wanting to - articulate ...

Finding the Music (Title needs some help. Suggestions welcome and appreciated!) A steady metronome ticking sounded from the analog alarm clock on the bedside table. In the silence of solitude, ...

I think the story was a bit cut-and-dry. (This is where I went. This is who I saw. This is what happened.) I think, especially given the topic you've chosen, ...

Quite lovely! It was strong in mood/feeling, and I love how you tie the rain into it as a metaphor. My only real suggestion: The third and fourth paragraphs seemed ...

Definitely some grammatical/techinical errors. I'm not going to get into that right now; just proofread yourself if you would still like some help, just let me know. I liked the ...

I really liked this. It's pretty much been said already but the description is really good. Very natural and easy to visualize. This is entirely my own style, so ignore ...

Tenses and a better title were giving me issues, so help would be appreciated (along with any other comments) ... She had been absently brushing patterns into the sweat of ...

Tongues of fire shot up from the ends of the stage as seizure inducing lights shot through the air, a cacophony of awesomeness and primal rock power shaking the crowd ...

This is something obviously you understand, and you've already organized your thoughts and put them into words. Maybe you should think about writing a story about or involving this road ...

The High Above Everyone looks To a higher pow’r, Be it almighty God Or a twinkling star. Whether wishes are thought of With candles outblown Or in the quiet of ...

I really enjoyed this. I like how you took an everyday object, with nothing really special about it, and wrote it in a way that sounds dramatic. It was funny. ...

I'm not going to pretend i totally understood it, but don't take that into account for to much. Metaphors often get past me. It was an interesting thought though, and ...

Very entertaining! 'The hag asked the mirror Who truly owned beauty. But the mirror responded, “Snow white – What a cutie.”'

Very entertaining! 'The hag asked the mirror Who truly owned beauty. But the mirror responded, “Snow white – What a cutie.”'