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Betrayal! It hits from dark depths. And wounds, impenetrates with fear and hate. You trust, give, and get ... Nothing! You do everything, Lose everything, left alone with yourself. All ...

Peace I sit on soft, moist grass, surrounded by trees, sun rays on leaves play like peacocks. Leaves calmly rustle, in the middle of a halcyon forest, on a clearing, ...

That was totally epic. I don't usually like any sort of poetry but this just threw me from my chair. And I totally agree with the message. :D Great work ...

That's very touching. I just can't express myself but it so inspiring even though I never had a defect but I kinda know the "why me" feeling. I liked it ...

Hmmm .... If I'm honest it sounds like a country song to me with all the "yeahs" and "honeys". I don't get the message and the repeating of the "been ...

It is ... Confusing. Probably because I haven't read the previous chapters but still at places I don't get the idea if Dominic is sleeping or not and who's dangerous ...

I totally get the message but as the others have already said it's a bit short so I would just put some more stuff in. You could tell why the ...

Yeah it didn't exactly pull me in. There is an obvious lack of description and the start is a bit off because it sounds like you're talking about writing a ...

This is the greatest thing i read this week. The emotions are so touchable. One of the best parts is the end where it is revealed that she came to ...

This story is about a main character in Assassins creed 2 video game, called Ezio. I hope you enjoy it. :D I walked down a long corridor decorated with lush ...

This was incredible by my opinion, since I played Assassins Creed 1 & 2. You described everything very good, but I suggest you widen everything a bit. Maybe slow things ...

I liked it a lot, but it needs some fixing. The whole thing is way to similar to the original Twilight series. They get married, she gets pregnant, he knows ...

I liked it. The story is great, but the thing I'm missing the most is a plot. Nothing really happens except that Becca drinks her martini, has an argument with ...

This is somehow a horror story I wrote quite a while ago and I finally decided to post it here. I hope you like it! :D I stood up from ...

A bit undeveloped. Events are just rushing past and you almost have no time to get it right. As many already said, you should develop the character more if you're ...