nativecatcher

As before I reviewed your third chapter and really enjoyed piece also! As everyone said I think you're very good at dialogue everything seems to flow and whenever it seemed ...

I really really like this!I haven't read your previous chapters but this makes me want to! I like how everything about this. It's interesting,quirky,funny, and has action as well. However ...

This is really good. I found it enticing from the moment I started reading. I really like how you organized it as well, it wasn't perfectly in order, but it ...

First, I'm not great with grammar so I can't say much about that. However I think I did a pretty good job with the piece. I must admit you did ...

Overall I must say I like this story.I like how you went straight into the action and didn't waste anytime,lol.I really like how you write, it has a sort of ...

I liked this overall.It's was very factual in a way because you explained everyone,who they were and what they did. I think that was an pretty good way to start ...

I loved this piece. I found it inspirational in a way and thought you communicated the message of not giving up in a magnificent way. Grammatically wise I can't go ...

confetti seems to have told you all about your grammar, which is good because I suck at grammar. However.. I must say when I first started reading I liked it ...

I'm not very good at grammar so I can't say much about that. However I can say that when I first started reading I really liked it because you described ...

This is a really cute story. To me it somehow seems to tell a lot with so little words.I think maybe you could have used a little more detail like ...

I really...love this story. I really hope you continue this because it's so interesting and well written I loved everything about this honestly. If this were a book I would ...

I think it's intriguing, it has caught my attention and I do want to know more about the situation. I didn't find anything wrong with the prologue either.When you post ...

I really like this so far. Usually I don't read action type books, I just watch movie, but this was really good. I don't have anything bad to say about ...

In general I really like your story, I think it has potential to be something special. The only thing I have to say is that at some points I felt ...

Wow. I feel like I have read something similar to this before, but something about this writing seems to give it a special edge. I think you did a great ...