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Re: “Full stop”
Thank you so much everyone and yes, boys have trouble talking to girls, especially if it's somebody they like. Those that say they don't are purely and simply... LIARS! Again, ...
Apr 5, 2009 -
Re: “Steady”
Thank you so much. I appreciate it ;-)
Apr 5, 2009 -
Re: “Full stop”
A dash – a semicolon; always just a- head of each line; like the ‘out of bounds’ sign – perhaps I should grow a spine. Perhaps I should finish my ...
Apr 3, 2009 -
Re: That Girl In The Mirror.
A good poem, but there are small mistakes. The face is still the same But that person isn't familiar. There should be a comma after 'same' and always before any ...
Apr 3, 2009 -
Re: To Society:
Now this is quite depressing. I'm not usually into this kind of poetry, but this one certainly caught my eye. I think that the rhythm and rhyming throughout is good. ...
Apr 3, 2009 -
Re: “Steady”
Steady your lung-sighs during Sabbath and sit in your once dark-brown armchair; now a spreading cancer of autumn beige steals the chair’s gown. Steady your once youthful coal-mine arms and ...
Apr 3, 2009 -
Re: Alone
This is a lovely, sentimental poem with a beautiful rhythm and rhyme scheme. However, I am not too sure about this line If I knew what started it, Forgive it ...
Apr 3, 2009 -
Re: Torture
Repulsion twists you all the while, From both the agony and my smile. I just love these two lines. The poem as a whole is very powerful. The repetition of ...
Apr 3, 2009 -
Re: “Words”
Wow, thank you for your lovely comment. You said it's hard for you to put your thoughts down on paper. Well, the trick is- don't think. Just write. Don't worry ...
Mar 9, 2009 -
Re: “Words”
Thank you for your lovely comments! I'm glad you like this poem. Yes, I understand your comment about 'just' Dearie and I agree. I will edit this out. However, the ...
Mar 6, 2009 -
Re: “Sepia pictures and red wine”
Thank you so much guys! I'm really pleased you like this poem. Hey ES! ;-p The reason why I described the glass as 'half-full' is because I wanted to emphasise ...
Mar 5, 2009 -
Re: “You say”
Thank you so much for your lovely comment and for your advice. I really appreciate it. ;-)
Mar 4, 2009 -
Re: “Sepia pictures and red wine”
Too familiar are the notes of Moonlight Sonata to me, like the hasty hum of roads searching for a place to flee. It plays to me always – or whenever ...
Mar 4, 2009 -
Re: “Words”
I keep trying to write words that just don’t yet exist within the pages of my personal thesaurus. My pencil keeps scribbling; the rubber keeps trailing the lead as the ...
Mar 4, 2009 -
Re: Concrete Apocalypse
This is great, but I have just a few little suggestions. Do you remember when the birds they You don’t need ‘they’ in this line. It’s grammatically incorrect. as it ...
Mar 4, 2009
