natalie

I love the imagery used, the mathaphor inside the poem creates a good flow and an interesting picture. I like the simple emotion, it is easy to understand and simple ...

I like the relation to the poppies. it is a good link to make when writing about war. During the first two stanzas you relate to eyes twice, it can ...

Hi At the moment the poem seems very broken, if you were to style it better, with more obvious verse etc it would run more smoothly.