narutobleachfan101

This mostly belongs on the back of a book. You want to draw in the reader with the first sentence. Other than that, it does intrigue my interest.

There was also this part: Snapping back to reality, I grabbed my black, school bag, and fell flat on my face when I finished rushing down the stairs. The falling ...

First off, I really liked this little snippet of hopefully what will be a great story. I thought it was really funny and I could especially feel the sarcasm coming ...

Oh my goodness! So much tension building! And is it a cliffy? 'Cause if it is, I want to know more!

Yo, this is Saya, first time reviewing. Your prologue captured my attention, though it sounded like sarcasm. (No offense.) Anyway, keep writing! I look forward to the next part.