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13/09/2009 I'll let this story sleep for a week, then I'll look at it again, edit, and send it to some magazine or other. So, anyone who can read sci-fi ...

Yo, I found the story's begining quite plausable as sci-fi goes. The begining is dramatic, the waiting/bonding part is convincing. I've read some opinions, that the protagonist loosing his temper ...

... a great story! Tight, with iron logic in the plot, like an early Heinlein almost. Or a Sheckley :D One thing only - spilling onto the pavement seems more ...

Thanx to everyone for their reviews, especially for reminding me not to write numbers with... numbers :D It seems the reader of the Perished needs to feel the sand beneath ...

I say, did Zeno have a younger brother, or perhaps was he himself like Raz, when younger? He seems to be quite smitten with the urchin. :lol: Also, I must ...

Yo Mo, thanxs for the review. It is a skeleton story, it can be inflated to twice its size, or to a vigenette, but I don't think i'll do that ...

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“Once there, you will have to find the heirs. There are three of them, all live in the same rural community in Wisconsin which is in the United States. Once ...

We have yet to see what life "up there" is like, although we already know it has militiamen and whores, but life "down here" is full of inadequate retards armed ...

Great snappy dialogue! I would say - worry not about cliches. In this day and age, you have to take yourself outside the human condition to reach really new grounds, ...

Another attempt of the begining of a snail paced story on a moon orbiting a gas giant :smt002

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Fan fiction it is Snoik, although I really am not a great fan of 40K, I leafed through two books, was not intruiged, but found the context interesting, and tried ...

Aye, more plot please, this could go into any direction. Could even be on another planet no? No grammar comments form me, I've yet to make my peace with English ...

TRAITORS The decision The inhabitants of the world of Crack were the target of scornful jokes through out the Emperor's dominions. It was a moon, slightly bigger than old Mars, ...