napalmerski

Yo, just finished your piece. The plot... is of the type I hate, but! - I've learned to see past my dislikes and revulsions, haha. Your style is pretty good. ...

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Ahem, thanks, but! If you haven't started the faeces yet, I'd rather you do the Sound of.. first :D It's smaller anyway

Hey, verrrry snappy story. Three internal consistency warnings: 1. The wounded comrade will hardly actually compliment the other one about 'good thinking with the barricade'. Unless he is a die-hard ...

Yo, just read your story! It starts like a classic in the genre, which is super. This bit at the end: The man flinched. He paused in thought for a ...

Yo, I see we have a 'flashback - inner gaze' chapter here. Taking place between the young positive dude waking and dozing off. Each of the three characters has a ...

Yo! Always nice to see someone maintain the post nuclear apocalypse scenario. I also have a fetish for it, Robert Heinlein's and Frederik Pohl's renditions are my favorites. WWIII, and ...

Er, want me to copy the story and underline stuff? Just kidding, my grammar is non-existent, I always do content reviews only :D A nice dramatic 'origin' story we are ...

Yo, this piece is a nice impressionist painting of a chopper battle. It's fun to start reading and suddenly appear to be in the midst of flying rockets and swirling ...

Yo, just read the three chapters. It is an interesting world that is coming into focus. Kind of post-appocalyptical, and very visual. Take Lu. Lu looks like a 1960's Clint ...

Yo, Empress 8) Deus Machini is indeed Deus ex Machina. I salute thee, so to say, I didn't know what when I was back in school. Although I had back ...

Yo, dear Empress, thank you for following through with this project and reading both the unfinished and the finished draft. I really needed a boost to finish it, and you ...

Yo, so... the plot thickens :D I mighty matriarch somewhere far away pulling string to get three babies killed before they reach twenty. The matrirch is fond of torture and ...

Yo, I can't stand school drama (almost as much as vampire and pirate fiction), but you have an exellent opening paragraph which introduces everything we need to know about the ...

Hi everyone! Here is a project. Now, I suggest we do not discuss anything, not the plot, not the characters, not anything. Just read the first chapter, and building on ...