napalmerski

Hehehehe, the cut-throat underworld of the legal art market, hehehe A very amusing concept, bravo! Executed in somewhat naive fashion, but still, a nice little story. The main character and ...

Yo, I've written comedy scripts for TV for two years before quitting, and all the jokes we used were mind numbing cliches /we had to follow a certain matrix, as ...

Ah, a cliff hanger! Super! It started like something I hate, and I only read it because of the smooth flow of the narrative. Which is already a compliment - ...

Yo moonjumper thank you for your goodwill, but obviously this is not for you. Saying that it does not make much sense is like saying that there are far too ...

Hey, this is exellent. Nice rhythm, got me interested imemdiately. Anyone with an attention span above that of a goldfish can go quickly through the whole thing if he/she is ...

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Yo, lovely plot. Just to point out, that you don't have to describe who undresses what and how the stage is changed during lights out, what you have to desribe ...

Yo, what can I say? First, I notice that the main character is speaking directly to the audience, discarding the invisible wall. In the begining, in acts 2 and 3 ...

Thanx for the review Nate! Half a million is not the population of the city, but the example of the most populated town where he's ever been. Before. I didn't ...

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Dude, dude, unles you are a lucky woman who invents Twilight or Harry Potter, and unless you are a lucky man who scores a hit with his first novel like ...

My life-changers /fiction/: 1. Anna Karenina, Tolstoy - a stylistic atom bomb, with the shattering attention to the most minute behavioral and psychological details, pioneered by Gogol and Lermontov,

Yo, I just made a few twiks to show where I think the rhythm of the style falters. Not how I think it should be written, its up to you ...

Hey, only a spouce who is in love with you will be able to follow these snipets :D You seem to be in dire need of feedback and motivation. I ...

I just saw Avatar man! There are parts there which are mirror images of your burning biosphere agony scenes, only in an alien setting of course. This means two things, ...