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"You aren't tuching me! Un less you take me to my friend."she said coiling back away from the man

sounds good to me..i can't seem to write fully in first person...

*Hur?*

*u o to bad for the people in the labs unless she's going to atack us?*shuderz*

'o crap' she tohought and followed. *sorry its short*

"I have no idea."she said again,"Unless you count people just off the beach that don't know what to do." "Ya that counts."He said signaling the piolet to go down. *that ...

*No i mean is she an arrcar in the Emrald Kingdom!With me there?*

Shin broke through her frozen state and she grabed a sward. "Ha!" she yelled as she slashed at the dragon.It's other arm came off as blood spattered on her.She trembled ...

*That's sad.*

*Is that in the real world?*

The dragon then caught sight of Shin and swiped with its good hand. She stood there looking at it as it came down on her...

Im doing third person in a naritive tone on proble four characters in my story and ya that was good. -em

"What was that?" Shin asked uncertine that she relly wanted to know.

Ok yes ill explain later and yes ill try to add more detail and no i havent read unloved yet....Ill try. :D -em

Shin smiled and giggled. Shiro was kinda funny...even better.