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mybrokenreality

  • Other Poetry Re: Originality.

    This was pretty awesome. It flowed very well, and made me want to keep reading. Overall, I liked it! Keep it up! :D ~mybrokenreality

    Aug 4, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: A poem I found..

    That was sweet. I can't believe you did that in 1st or 2nd grade! If you could do that then, you must be amazing now. :D

    Aug 4, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: arithmetic of the heart

    Hmm...I liked it. The was a lot of imagery that kept me wanting to read on. Now, I just have a few tips for you. Grammar. Your puncuation is mostly ...

    Aug 4, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: Masked

    Thanks! :D

    Aug 3, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: Forbidden Desire

    Hmmm....thanks for the tips. I'm going to look into everything you said, its really helpful. :D

    Aug 3, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: Masked

    I drew this a while ago, it's of an actual mask that I own. Unfortunately the feathers didn't come out too great...The poem, on the other hand, I wrote not ...

    Aug 3, 2010
  • Romantic Novels Re: Holding The Sun - chapter 1

    Hmmm...this was nice. I liked the opening and everything that you've written so far. I just have a few comments. Firstly, as soon as you finish a piece, and directly ...

    Aug 3, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Afraid Of The Dark

    I absolutely loved this poem. The personification of the wind and the imagery as a whole is captivating. It really makes you think about how being in the dark feels. ...

    Aug 3, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: untitled

    This was pretty good and overall I really liked it =) Ohh, these lines were my favorite: For there is no perfect line or time Just here and now Now, ...

    Aug 3, 2010
  • Welcome Mat Re: Hey! I'm new and kind of lost =)

    Hi! I'm Jess, a 14 year old author and poet. I'm writing a few books, I write fanfiction for Naruto haha, I finished writing a book with my two best ...

    Aug 3, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: I couldn't think of a title for it.

    I really liked this poem =) It flowed easily and showed emotion. Plus, this is the first piece of work I've read since I created an account, haha.

    Aug 3, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: Forbidden Desire

    Once someone told me something about desire They said to ignore it, for it was a forbidden concept They said nothing good would come from it Yet...I was curious and ...

    Aug 3, 2010


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