mybrokenreality

Good day all. This poem I wrote recently during a fit of rage. Well, moreso annoyance and distress than rage actually. But nevertheless, out of every bad moment, I find ...

Alright, much like what Grif above me said, the capital letters were highly distracting. But before I get into that, I want to talk a little about the content. Overall, ...

Thanks you guys^^ That was really helpful, and I think I'll try combining your two methods a little. I like the stanza's Rain created but also like the drama TPak ...

Listen, I wasn't really sure how to break this up into stanzas since I wrote it like this first. If you have any ideas on stanzas do you think you ...

Hmm...a lot of anger... Ha, but you have no idea why you were angry? Either way, good poem. Keep it up! :D ~mybrokenreality

Could you review one of my poems? Preferable one of these three that I've posted which include...The World is a Cruel Place, Broken Window, and Masked. Haha, take your pick. ...

Wow, this was great. I really connected with it. Music really is one of the greatest escapes there is, don't you think? Anyways, keep writing! :D ~mybrokenreality

Hmm...I like the storyline so far. It seems like it could develop into something interesting. Althought I do have a few comments. Now, a few grammar mistakes here and there ...

The world is a cruel place. Where a mistake could mean the end. And an accident, the begining. Where the claws of society will hold you tight, Molding you into ...

Wow...there was just so much...emotion put into this poem. I absolutely loved it. For some reason or another, these were my favorite lines: My life's been invested in your simple ...

Hmm...I really liked it in the perspective that I can relate to it. I'm not an insomniac but there are many nights when I do feel like this. It isn't ...

I basically agree with everything that Abigail pointed out. It's honestly a piece many people could relate to easily and some parts just seem to echo in my head. My ...

I really liked this poem! It reminds me of a person I used to know...she was a lot like the person you're describing here. Always enjoying life and making everyone ...

Well, to be honest, I liked it and didn't like it at the same time. For some reason the poem didn't feel like it had a very strong flow to ...

Hi! Thanks! :D Hmm...I understand what you mean and you're right. If I changed it, it would be a little better, wouldn't it? Ha, that was my favorite part too! ...