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Each step lingered on the broken road, as i submerged into a two dimensional world. The marble lake and blind sky, blurred into a single blank page. Enthusiasm was left ...

all considered, it has a really sweet topic, but i think that the verses don't flow quite right. what i would try to do is just read it aloud a ...

maggie i love it so much! i can't wait to here more of it! im jelouse of how well and detailed you discribe things!!!!! i loved the circus idea.. but ...

i added more.. as you can see Prologue As far as I know, I am the only one of my kind left on this planet. All alone, and unwillingly compelled ...

im a little confused as to how you mesured your stanzas.. they're all very caddywompus and cadenceless (i don't think that's a word) it seems at some times they rhym, ...

i edited it thanks to your guys's help, and as you may notice i tried to capitalize most of my I's i may have missed a few.. but I'm trying.. ...

This is really beautiful, though im still a little confused as to what it's about.... in the stanza "Listen to the silence The world stopped turning The clocks stopped ticking ...

i love this poem! but, "though frightening be the trips" sounds a little awkward, and i would change" and if it shall falter" to 'and shall it ever falter' just ...

Prologue As far as i know, i am the only one of my kind left on this planet. All alone, and unwillingly compelled to a curse that nearly sucked the ...

wow.. this is beautiful... even though I'm not at all a religious individual, this poem is really quite heart lifting, and gives me hope.. like *DaughteroftheMoon* said... i think that ...

wow.. i really like this poem!!!! it's really fun too read.. it kind of makes you want to just sit there and read it through aloud repetitively until your mother ...

sorry it needs lot's of editing i watch from the corner but i never say how i feel day after day she asks for more she teases and moans and ...

um this is beautful,but i was just wondering, is it about a rape? cuz if not i would try to revise it so it sounds a little less like that ...

i love this like crazily!!!!! it's great! i love how it flows, i love the subject i love everything about it! it also sounds like you know alot about music.. ...

The brisk morning breeze crept through the cracked window, but found the abode empty. The old man, alas, was not home. Wherer was he? The now curious breeze, shuffled through ...