moonlight123

Great beginning, A good story always draws you right in, that's exactly what this did for me.. ok, since everyone's already found all the mistakes, I just thought I'd tell ...

The air was thick with smoke and smelt of body odor as Dead Matter finished their last song. The crowd sounded like a wild animal as it screamed approval to ...

oooo! I love the ending! anyway, the story was really good! Great detail, great mystery. I think the part about the mother dying needs just a little more introduction. If ...

This was really good. I liked the way it started off, it drew me right in. In my opinion it goes through things pretty quickly... but i guess that's how ...

Obama's plan for healthcare is very controversial, I'd really like to hear some others opinions on it. DEBATE!

Ok, let's get this straightened out. *cracks knuckles* #1 sorry i made the drug addiction too causal, it was just supposed to be how a real rock star would see ...

The usually calm Nebraskan night was broken by the distant rumble of the loud rock band that was playing a few miles up the road in downtown West Point, Nebraska. ...

The roar of the nearby crowd overwhelmed Kyle Stone’s senses; it was going to be a long night. Even though he’d been touring the country, singing his suicidal lyrics paired ...

A dark sky above me, As I walk through the grass. The peacefulness surrounds me One world, one mass. I stop for one long moment, To watch the moon rise ...

oooh! Great poem! I'll just write a tiny bit. I have a suggestion to fix the stanza repeating... Just have it at the beginning and as the last stanza. make ...

For me, i was able to see pass the fact that their was no beat or rhyme, and just feel pretty disturbed by this. It good but a tiny bit ...

Thanks for all of your great suggestions (i must admit I'm a little embarrassed about putting 'mean' in there) And yes, it was about trees. I was thinking of this ...

Older than time, Standing watch here, Gnarled and rough, they stare, they leer. rising in silence, unnoticed there, Their beauty gone, and soon they glare. Jealous and rotten, they start ...

alright, the first reviewer was a bit harsh. I do agree with him an a lot of points, but it still wasn't an awful poem. The end was the best ...

Wow. I loved it though it sort of depressed me. I loved it because it said all the truths that no one really wants to think about. It was just ...