mlkbobe

There were a few things I saw that I'd like to show you. I'll put them in green and (parantheses). The Fortune Teller She stared off into space, thinking of ...

I have to agree with ElementalBlood. There was a lot going on and I got lost. I know you said you were trying to write a short story, but you ...

I thought it was good. Definately something I would be interested in reading more of. There was one sentence I found a little repetitive: There are papers and passports with ...

I knew something was wrong before I opened my eyes. This wasn’t my bed; the sheets were silk. And it didn’t smell like my room either; it smelled like a ...