mizz-iceberg

I agree with Room101. It's too short right now, and I don't even know what/who your main chracter is. But it does sound interesting and I'd like to read more ...

Awwee so sad. Yes it's cliche but I still really enjoyed it. The best pieces we write are when we are bored, like during Human Anatomy for example. Haha! If ...

A Dandelion Wish A childish face, Troubled with the ordeals of life Sought refuge, In the damp green grass, On a bright afternoon. Tear faced, he buried his head, In ...

hehe yes you did post in the wrong place but no worries! Great poem. great imagery. Is the title of the poem Forget Me Not, or Music of a Silent ...

Wonderful!! I really like how you described the factory. Yes Emily, she's personifying the factory. There were a few phrases in the poem that I'm sure I won't forget. You ...

I agree with Sohini, you need to capitalize your 'I's. I noticed some other grammatical mistakes. But mainly I think your poem doesn't sound too poem-ish...? All your verses are ...

I hope this part will be included in book three! I've been waiting for the last book of Inheritance Triology for quite a while now. When is it going to ...

My Math Textbook. Exams coming up.

You live in San Fransisco? Great imagery and description. I agree about with previous review. You need to find a rhythm. I loved your poem!! And you have described all ...

Simply WOW! Your writing shows that you really think like that while you are among nature. You don't really just take a walk, you look around, feel the night! Amazing ...

Now some action!! I really didn't know you were going to add that. Not too cliche!! I love to be surprised while I'm reading. I agree with all the above ...

The Negatives You are basically TELLING about Mary. Try and show your readers, her life her feelings through your writings. Maybe a scene with her father when she comes home. ...

Just the beginning. Not sure how it will turn out. Comment. Probably aiming for a long short story. ------------------------------------------------------------------ The long summer day's slowly beca

I prefer typing. My minds racing while I'm writing so if it's handwriting then my pringitn gets reallymessy and confused, but my typed speed is pretty good and I can ...

WOW. You painting is amazing. Grr. Wish I could paint as well. I have very limited talent when it comes to paintin or any kind of artwork. But you're really ...