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This was from Alicia's perspective, right? Great job again! She ran down the hall to the other side of the school were the gymnasium was like she had never run ...

Hello again! Kallipoe pretty much pointed out all the mistakes I noticed. You said that this was Dylan's perspective. But I don't think you showed us enough through his perspective. ...

Alright, first off, I love this! It's very cute and flowed very well. You've got me hooked, you see. So I will be trying to read all the coming chapters. ...

I think this would go well in poetry form ... no? Great descriptions and yes if you put it into poetry form, I think you would do quit well in ...

Hello And welcome to YWS :D This is intriguing and well written. But please change your font, its hard to focus on what you've written with this font. I agree ...

Oh thanks so much, you guys!! I'll make the changes right away and I'll add a part or rather a scene in the story that explains more in depth of ...

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Hey Adam!! This was really cute piece. I like the style you told this story and the humor was great. One thing, it would be better if you described Alice ...

Past Tense all the way! Occasionally I find myself writing in the present tense, for a change. But otherwise I am most comfortable with the past tense.

I had to learn french up to 8th grade then I can drop it. I dropped it and took spanish. Basically, for me, I learned french but I never spoke ...

Ok I went over all this and edited all the mistakes. Now what do you guys think?

*Claps* Good Job. I remember after the sixth book came out, my cousin and I spent a whole night discussing Harry. And after I got the last book (a day ...

YAYY, you finally posted more. But I didn't know where to find this as you suddenly changed the title (as I had told you to) and there was no hint ...

Thanks Pirhana! I agree with your review. The truth is, I'm not too good with punctuation when it come to poetry. As for the 'You and me' thing: I know ...

I used to think the same way. But I've planned to get a job and save up. Like from now! I've been to Hong Kong too. Well only for 13 ...