miyaviloves

Please! beware of your titles, first off i had the sound of music, now i have that holiday programme lol! As for the poem, i think you got some stick ...

I have noticed a huge increase on bullying stories and poems on here! But this is good, although i hate to say it to you, i think this kind of ...

This is a really lovely poem lexy! And Patrick has picked out the wolf imagery so i wont go over that again. I think this is a very nice peice ...

This is good, however it didnt evoke any emotion atall, i dont really get what the meaning is, if any. BUt you havea nice use of vocabulary, keep it up.

wow. That was brilliant, especilly 'I guide words like sheep to their pens'. Just wow, amazing stuff! I dont think i can give any advice on how to make this ...

i agree with the ending thing, it is a strnge word to end on. But other than that well done, it was a good read, with a good rythm thoughout, ...

Taken down due to re-working :D

I relaly like this, its simple and effective, although im not too sure about the last line? It confused me...but hey a great poem overall!

If you are basing this on a big brotehr experiance they are not allowed paper or anything to write with! Other than that little detail, i hope to see more.

i liked it but: Are you really still there? The day you left me we wept These two lines seem too long comapred to the rest of the lines in ...

Yeah i get what you mean by the 'chunky-ness' lol, and im now currently looking into re-writing it! Thanks for your comment! p.s. The last enrty isnt supposed to make ...

The friendship that blossomed between Yoshi and Kyoto was a rare one. From the first lesson they had spent together Yoshi had not wandered from Kyoto’s side. Kyoto thought it ...

Chapter one Kyoto sighed heavily. It was only third period yet all his energy had been pulled out of him. Not that Kyoto was a particularly energetic person anyway, in ...

I agree with the above comment, its good but very hard to read, and it needs some tweaking, but well done!

Hmm...well i cant really cut down the characters cos its a fanfiction from a film :\ and i am not involving some of them! Final fantasy can be verrrry confusing ...