miyaviloves

Heyo Jules, I haven't seen my creative writing teacher for ages as I have finished college for the moment, so I really don't know. I have looked into Agents by ...

I think you need to develop your characters more and give us a bit more of the story without just telling us, show us how things happened, it would make ...

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I totally agree with Sieg, the more you write the better you become, some of my first stuff I thought was simply amazing, but I look back on it now ...

Aww they seem to be developing a lovely friendship! (Or maybe Jon wants more hehe) I really like where you are tkaing thism you're writing is very well developed and ...

hello :) I know Alainna pointed out some stuff but i thought I might as well too as I go :) police was, Fun. Is there any reason why fun ...

I agree entirley with Crysi! You pulled this off very very well, shows you have a lot of talent! keep this up! Meevs x

i agree with most of what Clau said on this, but I will crit it all anyway :) He raise himself to the top Should raise be raised here? These ...

Gosh I had six hours of exams today was HELL, did anyone else take Psycology or English Lit and Lang ocmbined today? Also I need some help for my law ...

Broken Wings pretty much pointed out all that need to be here. And Pretty in Pink did not say much atall lol. Anyway, I really enjoyed reading this, you have ...

I loved this! I can't point out anything wrong, I loved it. full stop. There we go, I have nothing else to say! Meevs xxx

I don't think it was bland, but then again I can't say im too familiar with your other poems. I think this was a really cute poem, and I think ...

Oooh i liked this, very catchy rhythm to it! I have read a few of your poems today and this one i like the best! Well done keep it up! ...

Wow quick replies! thankyou both! Alainna - glad you are enjoying Ice Cubes! And I'm glad that you keep reviewing and giving advice, it meas a lot to me! MB ...