miyaviloves

Alainna I have been waiting sooooooooooooo long for this! I swear you do keep us all in suspense on purpose :p !!! Anywho, I liked this, I think it's great ...

this certainly is unique - but i know you have an R rating but you might want to put somewhere before people read it about the graphic images (it might ...

Ok, you have a good start here, although if he is now going to start telling a story, the whole scene with a therapist is a tenny bit cliche...unless in ...

hello there :) I thin kthat most of the mistakes I found have been pointed out here already (one less job for me to do) :) Anyway, I really liked ...

Oooh what a threatening poem??? I must admit here that the last line does really make the rest of the poem er yay for the last line?! ...wonder what's in ...

I agree completly with Claudette here - this is extremly hard to understand without you explaining it. Fair enough it's a haiku but dosen't there still needs to be some ...

I agree with Gadi that it is rather bland. Personally i didn't connect with it at all...but poems are like that really, you either do or you dont :\ Still, ...

hmm...well I didn't get it but I'm not sure there is really all that much to get is there? I agree with Trident that it is a lot to do ...

Oh and one more thing - you said somewhere "Be at home with my kids" or something along those lines (I can't find it >.

Wow, I really really enjoyed reading this! I couldn't spot any mistakes but I wasn't really looking out for them too much I was so engrossed in the story! It's ...

Hello, this was a good piece overall but here are my suggestions: The two colossal spires showed above the canopy of trees. They were the symbol and the landmark for ...

Aww poor Fred, he must have really wanted someone to talk to!!

Thankyou both for taking your time to read and comment this! It's my first time at writing fantasy so I wasn't sure how my 'fantasy people' should look like. Mayve ...

hey hey, first off you could break this up a bit, at the moment it is just one big block, seperate the speech, you might get more reviews that way ...

heyyy my name is Abby (minus the e) full name Abigail or is that it? I go by the name meevs yeah :D Welcome to YWS! I really look forward ...