miyaviloves

As it has taken me ages to crit again everyone had beaten me to it - less work for me though right? hehe. Anyway liked getting a bit of history ...

This was an interesting beginning, im intrigued about the people and their way of life - so i want to read more! But here are my suggestions: “What is your ...

Hmm yes, I liked it, but like Gwenevire I'm no good at poetry so I can't really give any technical or useful tips or anything. I didn't reallllyl get what ...

yay I didn't really have to wait for this part as I have been away for so long! so YAY...bet the next part will be ages tho :P Anyways, I ...

Well, I'm so sorry that I haven't read this for ages!!!! But here we go: I can't help agree with the above crits - that it's lacking that certain something, ...

That was really good - you used descrition well without over doing it. I understand thatthe moon is important but in the opening paragraphs you repeat 'moon' a lot of ...

This is an interesting beginning! “Five more minutes,” Came the seven-year-old’s protests . -I would put protest here as he only protested once ^_^ I think you could make it ...

I think that because it is slightly obscure really makes the story! It makes you think - andf you do give the answers in the end so I think that ...

Hmm I have to admit that I don't really see anything in this poem, you talk about how you wonder about things, but there is no real depth in it ...

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I've never done NaNo before either so I'm really excited about it ^_^ Title: Yet to decided one, I'm terrible at choosing titles :( Genre: Fantasy Summary of your NaNo: ...

Well, I didn't really understand it but I liked it in a strange way. Fair enough it dosen't have a plot and the characters are almost non-existant, but I like ...

Hmm in all honesty I didn't enjoy this much. The characters were very cliche - but I can tell that you are deliberatly putting the typical 'jocks and cheerleaders' across. ...

Hmm...Ok...here's what i'm going to point out: oswitch from present tense to past tense a LOT - I do it a lot too, you don't realise you're doing it. BUt ...

OK, sop Kittykat pointed out a lot of mistakes but I'm also going to go over them :D It's obvious that you have a talent for writing here - but ...