miyaviloves

This suprised me, I thought at the beginning it was going t obe from the point of view from someone at the Columbine High School shootings or something. Either way ...

I would say....blonde hair medium height, dark eyes? Anything close there??

I'm back and I am ready to claim back my title of biggest Lyla fan! MUWAHAHAA! I thin kthat you are really developing the characters well, and I love how ...

I have a confession to make. I never really tried to save him. I actually am the one that committed the crime. I killed him. This thought has been probing ...

To be completly honest with you I didn't like this piece much, and it wasn't because it wasn't any good, it's just not really my thing. Jostled through the doors ...

say cat puke. -Puke is rarely used as a word atall over here, sick is the more common word Thanks for the crit, this has completly changed now, Im just ...

Thanks for the crit, I have re-wrote this beginning, more explanation and I think it works better now, hopefully, I will change it on here soon. Thanks, Miya xxxx

I think that you can write about anything - it dosen't really matter if you have experienced it or not, I just tend to write and for some reason write ...

Ok, Im gonna crit this as I read it, so If I say something stupid which then gets answered later, I do apologise :P too long too - too long ...

I really liked this - which is something as Im not a huge fan of poetry - I apprecitae it but I cant write yeah :D I liked the middle ...

That was so odd!

Well to start with I will admit I didn't like this atall. I didn't feel that there was anything there, and just becuase it's a song dosen't mean it can't ...

I usually don't like poetry like this...although it was a little cliche in parts I actually enjoyed it :) kisses me with passion, protects me from sin. -Although I like ...

ok! So this is the first chapter and a bit of Ice Cubes, for those of you that remember it - it's very different now, and it still needs a ...

I agree with a lot of what Saint said, I didn't feel anything for the characters at all. I also think you relied a bit too much on dialogue here, ...