miyaviloves

Hi Evenstar Im Meevs and I'm going to review this for you :) here I go! A single iridescent raindrop ran along the window’s outer surface, stretched thin and long ...

This is a very good piece of writing, I want to know more about the man, why he felt the need to write such a bitter letter. Will you let ...

This is a really interesting start of a story, already there is a sense if disequilibrium, which she is trying to restore, but already we know that she is going ...

Ok first welcome to the YWS as I see you are a new member :) Secondly we havea rule here that for every piece of yours that you post you ...

Ok first things first. It is a general rule here that for every piece of work that you have posted you should have reviwed atleast 2 other pices of work, ...

I loved the repetition at the end of this, it worked really well and bought brilliant empthasis to thne end of the poem. I thought this was a good inishgt ...

Don't post your work again in the same post, be patient and people will review you. YOu have also only reviwed one other piece of work the ratio is 2:1 ...

Hi Sarah welcome to the YWS! First things first there is a rule here that for every piece you post you must have reviewed two otehr pieces of work, its ...

One of the owls eyes is not as defined as the other, other than that this is pretty good, I love the detail you put into things. Is anything going ...

I agrew with Krupp about the I am thing. Try to make it less ordinary, at the moment you really are just making a list. Try to add some personality ...

Yay part 3!!! he have an enemies -Any Edgar Pastor I thought his name was Edward? This confused me a little bit :S Other than those two things this was ...

Hey Lauren welcome to the YWS! If you have any qyestions feel free to PM me at any time I will be happy to help out with anythng :D Look ...

I really liked this as well, its almost taking the innocence away from childhood, well thats how I saw it anyway. I thought that the thunder booming part was a ...

Ohh the story gets better :) I want to know what Jamie did, what he was writing about in the letter. I liker that they are now in the same ...

Ah the mother is obsessive I really don't like her! I understand ehr reasons of being so protective over Summer, not wanting her to go through what she did. But ...