mistielovesyou

This is a great topic, and it could use a lot of discussion. Is it the principal's fault that Marius amounted to nothing more than a high school principal? When ...

This story seems a little out of touch at times. It's really good when it gets to the characters. But when you try to "tell" the story: I can only ...

That was really very good. Well-written, and it has a lot of story in it. By that I mean that I could really get the emotion and essence of the ...

This was okay. I agree with the last reviewer that this seemed a little...fake. I felt no emotion from the piece. You have a really good concept here, but it ...

It's very unique, and I very much liked the ending. But there was something about your tone at the beginning that almost led me to believe this was just another ...

Wow. Um I don't know what to say. That was genius. Very good. Um, I don't have much to critique. I loved your language and the way you weaved in ...

In the beginning of this, I was a little confused as to who which characters were which. Just make it a little clearer because they all have same-sounding names. You ...

I like this one, definitely. Usually I tell writers with vague stories like this to include more detail, but you managed to include just the right amount. Very good. I'm ...

Wow, that was good! I'm surprised that no one comments... Anyway, the pacing was just fine. I was actually shocked at the ending. This was really good. The only criticism ...

This needs some improvement. And not just with the things the last reveiwer mentioned. This story has nothing to bring the reader in and engage them in it. The writing ...

This would be really good, if it weren't for the way this is written. A lot of the language you use is very choppy and cheesy. It seems like you're ...

This is very good, in that I really felt for this character. Even though I myself am not the type of person to blame my problems on others, I could ...

This is a pretty good story. I liked the characters, the relationships, and the different dynamics. The only problem is that this is a little wordy. Example: The three of ...

I really liked this story, with the description and the imagery. I agree with the previous reviewer when he said that I couldn't really understand the connection. I could get ...

I"m going to take a wild guess here: is this a story about a schizophrenic? The neglected hygiene, the 'ants', and isolation. It was really good. One of the better ...