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Re: 19 minutes
Listen, this is a very nice story with a nice context, but that's it. It's just nice. You used far too many details in the beggining which prove to be ...
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Re: There is still tomorrow
This is very good writing, and i like it. Though it is very vague. I loved it but it would just a tiny bit better if you tried to incorporate ...
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Re: Long Strides
I was trying to convey a weird message here..See if you can get it. Enjoy :) "Sometime TODAY Barry!!!" Lugging these heavy sacks up the hill. Again. And again. "Come ...
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Re: My Dear Friend Depression
I know you were trying to make a point here, but it wasn't good. Perhaps you could write a story in a different way, and include just dialogue? I don't ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Space Oddity (contest)
I liked this, and the emotions and everything presented in this. I especially felt the desperation of the man, and his sorrow. Good writing. I wouldn't really fix anything here, ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Understanding in a car crash.
That was awesome. I really liked your approach on death, and how you made it seem more "happy" than most. I'm not a nitpicky person, so I didn't see any ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Crazy Glasses
Thanks so much you guys, for the reviews!! I'll be sure to fix some of the errors with the phone-thing.
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Crazy Glasses
I got this idea from an idea-generator that told me to write a story about a glass. Enjoy :) She burst into the house, screaming, ‘enough is enough, John! I'm ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: How To Shuffle
Wow, this is pretty awesome. I actually laughed a little (and it is rare that I ever laugh during a comedic story, even one that others crack up at). I ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Dangerous Games
This is good, but I have a few suggestions (of course): Firstly, lose the bolded writing. Good writing doesn't need bolded words to convey a feeling or point. Trust me, ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Influenza
I really liked you idea, but I think your execution was a little bland (IMHO). Maybe it was the way you described the story, but it needs a little more ...
Jun 8, 2011
