mistielovesyou

This goes very fast. There's no room to get to know the character, or to really understand the story. I understand that this is 'short stories' but this was a ...

Yeah, I agree with the previous reviewer. She already got you on all the poor writing, but the story didn't have any depth either. We just see her as an ...

I really liked this. I liked the way you described the woman, and how easily the reader could understand her. You could see her life, her fears, everything. All without ...

So little time. They run about. Run. Before they catch you. Run. Before they snap that picture. Before the light blinds you all in it’s flash. Don’t you know what ...

This is very good. I liked how you went in and out of 'flashbacks' and the way you wrote this. It is kind of choppy with the flow in some ...

He spots me from across the club. How do I look? Alone, hot, confused. Hopefully. I can see him dancing with a woman as equally needy as him, moving his ...

I think this is pretty good. I agree with the first reviewer when they say your details could be broken up a little more. The only problem with this is ...

The problem with this story is the CONSTANT cliches. I mean, every single character of yours seems to be some kind of stereotypical high school character. Very annoying and distracting. ...

I liked it. The details you added in were nice, especially about the ice on the frozen food. Added a nice quality to it. However, the characters you presented were ...

Everybody is in line for a shot. The posters on the wall support this shot, calling it “good for your health” “good for long-term” “can make you happier”. The people ...

This is the type of writing that seems good at first glance, but it isn't. You really, REALLY should not write while listening to music. I used to do it ...

This was pretty good, although like the first reviewer, I don't completely understand what you're talking about. If you want to, you can add details to make the symbolism more ...

This is okay, but I don't think you pulled off the choppy, plain sentencing. VERY few writers can. This just comes off as unskilled writing to me. Although, I liked ...

This was a very good piece in an aesthetic way, but just okay story wise. Your descriptions and writing was really beautiful, but I can't tell if this story is ...

This was okay, because I could relate to the protagonist. Otherwise, it was rather predictable (like the other commentor) said. You could make the characters more interesting. This story was ...