misspyschorocker

Just a few quick notes. I think how you said "human and enchanted alike" in the first paragraph was good, so we know what we're dealing with, however I think ...

Is there such a thing as "too much" description? Because if so, you did it. I'd rather read about the plot than what they are all wearing, and I was ...

This should be on the fiction boards. You need to learn how to separate dialogue and correct grammar and all that. No one will want to read this if there ...