misspriss

was good, but the grammar mistakes really spoiled it for me. I'm not going to point out the individual mistakes because I'm too lazy to do that right now, but ...

Goodness gracious! Girl, where is your grammar? *raises a critical eyebrow* Here we go...*deep breath* Read this SLOWLY out loud to yourself and MAKE SURE to pay close attention to ...

It was okay, and I agree doesn't seem to have anything to do with faith, however, here is my critique. On the first verse, last line, you should have ended ...

I am guessing you want me to finish the sentence so I will. He brought another to his bow, drawing the string back when..... It snapped. His trusty bow, something ...

¡Hola! Mi nombre en la sociedad joven de los escritores es misspriss, pero mi nombre verdadero es Ana. ¡Bienvenidos! :D Espero ver que usted alrededor y yo sepamos solamente un ...

Hullo! Welcome to YWS. (So what if I'm the third person to say that, it's the thought that counts, right?) I hope to see you 'round! ~Anna

Don't worry Gyr, I'm a hater of all veggies, give me fried chicken or give me death! :D Fand, I am a Christian and I agree with you about the ...

Ahhh...

This is pretty DARN good for a twelve year old. :-) I thought it was good and can really only repeat what Phorcys said, it could have used some more ...

What kind of explosion? What was it caused by? What are the surrounding? Here are some things to think on... What do your see? Spare tires flying through the air ...

Ahhhh, that IS a bit more believable. :) (Sorry! Homeschooler over here! We don't really go by grades. :oops:)

Why harsh? Do you mean unbelievable? (Sorry Arclight, but if we don't believe that you wrote it when you were seven and you did, then we just paid you a ...

Oh, and something else I thought of, sometimes it just seems like your saying, "And he did that, and then she did this..." Add vivid words to describe HOW he ...

Hullo there, I'm just...a human being...who likes...to--uh--write! :-) And Shafter is right, it's hard to offend people on this site (though not impossible, I assure you! :wink: ), I hope ...

Ahhh! Thank you, it does.