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This was pretty cool. I really liked it. The opening sentence was made me wonder "Why was there a wall trapping them?" and that alone made me really curious. One ...

This was a great prologue in my opinion. The descriptions, especially when she's in pain, were really great. My favorite one was when she felt like the lightening was surging ...

Alright, the good thing about your story, the great thing in fact, is that your descriptions completely show me how this girl thinks and feels. It also made every thing ...

I thought the poem was interesting and I found the ending clever where the monsters return in their sleep. Nice touch. I couldn't find much wrong with it, but I ...

Thanks guys. I told my friends about this idea a while ago and they thought it was the dumbest thing they'd ever heard, but still funny. Then when I told ...

I was bored, and I like making signatures, so I thought, "Why not make one with Bush in it". Isn't picture editing fun?

I liked this a lot more than the prologue since it went into detail more and such. I don't have much of anything to say except a couple suggestions. I ...

I'm going to tell you now, I have no idea how I came up with this because it is the dumbest thing I've ever thought of. It was the middle ...

This was well written and kept me interested, but I think you could have done more with it. What I mean is you could have added more suspense to it. ...

It was pretty well written, and I found it very interesting. The only problem was that there were letters missing or added to words at least 4 times. It might ...

Is this going to be like the movie Red Dawn? Where Russia invades us, gets rid of the parents, and then the kids are the only ones left to fight? ...

It didn't get me completely interested, but there was a bit of a magical feeling as I read it. My favorite part, though, was when she opened up the box, ...

Holy crap. When I first started reading it I thought this was going to happen, but I thought to myself, "No way, who would do that?" Then I kept reading ...

Here's the second half. They continued to follow the river for another half hour. Higai was getting more and more impatient, his fingers rubbing the amulet rapidly. Gabriel knew he’d ...

Ya, I'm pretty hooked too. I will admit it was an information dump, but I thought it was pretty cool. Personally I think this sounds like it would be an ...