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Hello Conrad. Just so you know, I didn't read the other reviews, so pardon any repetition. But then again, if there's repetition then you know for sure it should be ...

Hey Mesme, how's it going? I didn't read the other reviews so pardon any repeating on my part. The summons from the Kalagat came in the middle of the morning, ...

Brendan was curled up in his black bean-bag chair in the opposite corner, surrounded by magazine clippings of random things. "Random things" just doesn't seem descriptive enough for me. At ...

A little boy of that age was hugged into her furs, Of what age? I looked through the preceding sentences, and you may be referring to ten years, which was ...

Thanks for the review Esme. Long, but helpful. First, considering when he gets his powers, I understand what you're saying, and I'll alter how it went down. But for the ...

There are many articles on YWS and elsewhere that tell how to use the comma, but I've decided to present the less commonly mentioned ones, the ones that usually are ...

Well, this is the first chapter of your story I've read, but I'll give it a crack anyway. “Then why did you-” For parts like this, a triple period works ...

I know it's been a long one, but this is the final part of A Blank Page's prologue. I hope you've enjoyed the ride so far, and I can't wait ...

Okay, I'm back. “You’re lucky my friend knows a thing or two about bikes. That thing–” “You sold it?” I shrieked. “You sold my Buell 1125CR?” How did she realize ...

Just so you know, I didn't read the other reviews, so pardon any repeating on my part. The young king stared at the city before him, its towers rising to ...

Thanks for your review ankhirke. I'll try and fix those things in due time, but for now I can't (it's 11:15 and I've got summer school tomorrow). You're doing a ...

My legs and arms twisted around painfully as I rolled, getting caught in random branches. Don't use the word "random". It's a word that's descriptive, but at the same time, ...

My legs and arms twisted around painfully as I rolled, getting caught in random branches. Don't use the word "random". It's a word that's descriptive, but at the same time, ...

Jack Mitchell crept out of the shadows of the warehouse and looked both ways before turning back and waving the crowd in. It's a little thing, but by changing "crept ...

I was editing a couple pictures together for a story of mine (I always add a picture when I post a story. It's just more fun), when something odd happened. ...