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Wow, this was pretty cool. It makes perfect sense too, because after being exposed to lifetimes of hurt, its only natural for someone to get pissed at the world. It ...

Here's chapter 2 of The Curse Of Fate. I think there's going to be more chapters than I previously anticipated since I'm shrinking each ones length. Oh, and to avoid ...

Hello everybody. Like last time I'm only going to post the first half of the chapter since the second half isn't finished. I'll be thankful for any reviews, even if ...

Well done, snoink. I couldn't find anything wrong with it. It was really well written, and If it goes on I would like to read it.

Alright, let's get started. They were both staring at him intensely and the fact that her long brown hair made her seem even more intimidating, did not help the situation. ...

Very well done. There's nothing for me to say since everyone else has done it, but it wasn't much anyway. I especially like the way you described her pain and ...

Hey, I guess I'll be your critique guy. Water lined everything, covering the walls, ceiling, floor, a layer of water like a perfect mirror. In the centre of the cavern, ...

Thanks for the critique Rubric. I fixed what you told me to and will try to remember what you've said when writing the next chapter. And no, I haven't read ...

This is the first chapter of my story The Curse Of Fate. It's about a warlock fighting fate to save the one boy who will be able to save the ...

Then the trees broke on ethre side of the road... I think you meant to say either, but that word doesn't work in that situation. Just say they broke on ...

This is much better than your first post. It gives us a quick insight on what her life is like and what she goes through with those freaky past lives ...

Answer to question 1: Because you're sadistic. Answer to question 2: No, I don't. I'm just kidding about the sadistic thing. It's natural, I think. Anyway, don't torture a character ...

One word: Brilliant. This was amazingly well written. It held deep thought, made sense, and even makes the reader question what they believe at moments. I think it was these ...

Hey, it's me again. I liked this chapter more than the first but I've still got a few things to say. Tor likely didn’t die because the acid in the ...