mikedb1492

I was bored today, and decided to make a tennis avatar. What do you all think? These are the pictures I used/edited with Edit: Here are the two I made ...

I'm short on time, so I didn't read the other reviews, so pardon any repeating. So far, nothing peculiar had happened, which iniself was By 'iniself' I think you mean ...

It was common knowledge among the students at the Academy that he was the leader of the Freedom Fighters, a mysterious band of rebels who devoted their considerable skills to ...

A mass of extremely curly red hair was piled on top os her head. You mean 'of' not 'os'. They wore black tight-fitting black leather suits You said black twice. ...

She would have been happy to stay like that to if her horse hadn’t suddenly let out a snort of alarm. You need an extra 'o' in 'to'. You do ...

That's one great drawing. It's full of mysticism and such. Really professional. I could see it actually being used. The folds in the clothing and his expression are great as ...

A young woman walked down the dark empty hallway. Whenever you have two words describing the same noun, you need a comma between them. So put one between dark and ...

I'm not sure what to think of this one. It was interesting, but more of an outline of someone's life than a story. It could almost be an introduction to ...

The sun beat down on us, matting my hair to my shoulders. I'm not sure sun alone could do that. Maybe integrating sweat as a factor would make this better. ...

Thank you all for your critiques with this, and I'm happy you enjoyed it. I couldn't be happier with the result. And I'm happy my writing could help you, Stolenhearts. ...

Meanwhile, John writhed in agony his cells, one by one, ventured put 'when' after 'agony'. Wow, that was weird. This was probably the most randomly weird thing I've ever read. ...

Thanks for the reviews. And I understand what you're saying about the ending completely, Chocoholic. It was kind of a last minute addition that I thought would be fun, although, ...

I've set a goal out for myself to write everyday. Some of you may already do that, but I've been lazy lately. And so, this is my first short story ...

I could taste the breather's fear on the tip of my tongue, it's bittersweet tang entwinined itself You mean its not it's . When you want to say it is ...

The captain didn’t speak for a moment and Serge knew he was confused by Amaury. “Inspector,” secretary Macron begin in a rush, You mean 'began' not 'begin'. “Already I’ve been ...