metalzulu

You've got the right idea, but your not writing poetry here, at least there isn't any kind of rhyme scheme... And gods they became. But the powers were restless. They ...

Space, you really are being a little brutal. 'You need to spell better'? Excuse me sir, but I believe you do. I liked it, I thought you were explaining a ...

First off Very good. Enzo, please read the rules before 'reviewing'. Now; Cauan, here is what I found. “Fine, I’ll go and do it right now.” And with that, he ...

Enzoguy15 Very good. Enzoguy15, try a more constructive reply please, read the rules before posting. As for you Cauan, there are a few problems; -- "Fine, I'll go and do ...

Quite a bit of action. But it all happens so suddenly, you described a 'long' fight in 3 lines. Describe the fight a bit more. Maybe; I whipped my paws ...

First review, so here goes. Good idea you have there, though lacking in imagery. Its good to leave a little to the readers imagination, but this is a little much. ...