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I like the fuzziness; I think it gives the photograph an oil-painting like quality. It's rather entrancing.

Did you by any chance base this poem on 'Dulce et Decorum est' and 'The Sentry' by Wilfred Owen, especially the last stanza? I think you're trying to acheive a ...

Thanks for reading Araidne and sunshine girl.. but it would be useful to know specifics. Thanks for taking the time anyway.

I thought this poem was.. okay. Teensy bit cliche and general and maybe try to make it more personal, use different imagery that no one would think of (unlike "the ...

The way you have to work out what the hidden message spells takes some time and you have to work it out and separate the words--- this reminds me of ...

I really like this. I like your style of writing- I can't put my finger on it but it's just quite believeable, realistic and not over the top at all. ...

I know it's irritating when poems are untitled but I honestly don't know what it should be- anything I come up with is too cheesy or obvious so suggestions are ...

I'd rather let the reader guess what it's about than telling them. everybody can interpret words differently so it should just be how you interpret it, not how you're told ...

Man Man, Could you please tell me your name? Where was it that you last spent the night, Man? The godforsaken ramshackle of A warehouse carries your odour. Sober, I’m ...

Have you ever seen/read Samuel Beckett's "Not I"? . If you haven't, try to; this reminds me of it.

Little did she know, She had a friend in me. Little did I know, That- she could see.

haha, you really are stalking me /SOPHIE/; Ben Folds does rock though.

I can see this song in a Ben Folds kind of style, listen to some of his stuff. "You broke the most important promise you made We’re not gonna share ...

I think it is repetitive because it's a song? As in, there is a chorus which you repeat... correct me if I'm wrong.

i like this alot- really. Especially the "table drumming... real strumming" bit- but i thought certain things could do with just sharpening up a little: "I dont think she ever ...